May 22, 2011 Victory of Heart – Octain – Picture Prompt by Walter Parada – @onestoppoetry
The victory that matters is you
smashing through my walls leaving piles,
conquering me with loving smiles.
Your arms crush me for the breakthrough.
Holding your liege, sweet lips besiege,
my soul enveloped by your coup.
Seizing my heart with gentle wiles,
true victory that matters is you.
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Knight of the Heart (knightsheart) 
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Elisa's Spot
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Interesting view to see people as having to have walls to be broken down to love. I see ideals and idols in this too. Thank you for the ponder!
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knightsheart
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You are welcome Elisa. Thank you for seeing the depth of words here.
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brian
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oh i would certainly not mind being conquered thus…ha. nice octain sean
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knightsheart
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Thank you Brian. Yes funny how that works . The xonquerers are conquered…
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jinksy
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PIles??? Not a pleasant picture! 🙂
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knightsheart
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The original words that Iwas unhappy with are in the revised version for a taste of both.
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wurdz
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an amazing victory that would be.but the walls must be torn down.thank you for the write!
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knightsheart
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You are welcome. Yes the walls must come down…
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Glynn
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You turned the photo into a love poem – and a good love poem. Well dobne, Sean.
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knightsheart
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Thank you, Gylnn. I appreciate your comments.
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Sam Parrotto
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“true victory that matters is you” – I have always been intrigued and compelled by imagery of warrior and love – how closely they connect – war making words are so parallel to those of winning a mate… very clean…
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knightsheart
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Thank you, Sam. I am glad you appreciate the wordplay between war and love.
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coalblack
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melted her way through stone, did she? ha!
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knightsheart
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Yes- one stubborn warm woman – devastating
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john
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Love will win…
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knightsheart
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I agree love always wins
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SallyJ
said
An octain – brilliant.
‘sweet lips besiege,
my soul enveloped by your coup.’ Love is unstoppable.
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knightsheart
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Thank you Sally. – I agree love is unstoppable ~ relentless.
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C Rose
said
I like that you spun this about conquering the heart.
“Holding your liege, sweet lips besiege,
my soul enveloped by your coup.”
Really enjoyed that couplet ~ Rose
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knightsheart
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Thank you Rose. I am glad you enjoyed the words. 🙂
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RepressedSoul
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Wow, one strong woman!
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knightsheart
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Relentless as well. Thank you Shân
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mystic margarita
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You interpreted the picture as conquering of the heart — beautiful and innovative!
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knightsheart
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Thank you, MN.
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leah
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great octain.
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knightsheart
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Thank you, Leah
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ayala
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I like that you turned it into a love poem- lovely!
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Jingle Poetry
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join us today.
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dani
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subtle changes in your revision. i like both versions.
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knightsheart
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Thank you Dani
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moondustwriter
said
you nail the victory call – the picture sets it off and your final words solidify it.
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knightsheart
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Thank you, Leslie
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Steve Isaak
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Good read. =)
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knightsheart
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Thank you, Steve.
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alee9
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Like most of those who’ve read your poem, I, too, love how you wrote a love poem with the cold too perfect-to-be-love prompt! Wonderful take, indeed.
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knightsheart
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Thank you. I am glad you liked it